“I think this is a perfect scene to use in your essay, but I feel if you told the reader what discourses were at play in the scene it would give the reader a better understanding of what you are trying to make a point with in the scene and how to apply the scene with what Delpit was talking about.” – comment on classmates discourse paper  link for the paper – https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Ny0YgZA4LqW6PGXGIqAYSshsZbopmguQBn4Xrx-TkGk/edit
“The scene used here I feel is counter productive to what you are trying to argue in the paper giving more support to gees argument. Try to think of some different ways of looking at and explains the scene so that it supports yours and Delpits argument” – Comment on classmates discourse paper link for the paper – https://docs.google.com/document/d/1b8B-pKwM01VTqz2AOixhX-oL5Qi1ZfJ20jlMxQE2UC4/edit
“I think giving more detail on how Mrs Smith helped you become a better writer would help the reader understand why she meant so much to you.”
“This is a great paragraph and you seem to have a moment of revelation in it when writing your essay adding more detail about that moment where it just clicked for you would make this stronger.” – Comments on classmates Narratives link for the paper – https://docs.google.com/document/d/1RTWf5CNQ-CxuzYQITlNEMR56GtXnXbVD4sVDy3ALp4M/edit